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My grandfather is a kindly oldest people.He loves life,So he often help the other people clean home and student culture.They like very grandfather.My grandfather often helps me chinese student culture,for example: Honolulu and sanguine.My grandfathers have two big eyes and short hair.So he look like very cool.He has much good friends.They often go fishing and play the basketball.