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My grandfather is a kindly oldest people.He loves life,So he often help the other people clean home and student culture.They like very grandfather.My grandfather often helps me student chinese culture.For example, Honolulu and sanguine.My grandfathers have two big eyes and short hair.So he look like very cool.He has much good friends.They often go fishing and play the basketball.