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雅思写作范文:父母应该多陪孩子

发布时间:2013-05-15 12:03浏览次数:1388
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雅思写作主题:父母应该多陪孩子,字数在300字以内。

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文中词汇表达多样性不足,在学术词汇方面尤其要多积累;正确句子比例较高,适当增加复杂句的使用,文章会更出色;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;请注意分段。

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parents should with theirThis summer, I move to a new city with my parents, and I transfer to a new school. I used to live in the countryside, so my new life is so different from before. The school is a little far from my home, so I go to school by bus. After school, I have many activities in school. Classmates are friendly to me. I learn English now. It’s so interesting that I like it very much. Besides, life in city is different. There are many interesting places to go. At weekends, my parents take me outside. We go to the park, the zoo or go shopping. But we are not so familiar with our neighbors. I think we should build good relationship with them.

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