文中单词拼写做的不错,另外再增加词汇量积累就更好了;作者可适当增加词汇的丰富度,部分句子有错误;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;请注意分段。
It is a father's day.I want to with father talk about father'day a little stroy.My father tells me can help father clean home and cook breakfast in the father'day.This is father like to see thing.SO my go up early help parents cook breakfast. When my parents go to kitchen see anything is very happy. In father'day ,my parents and l go to the park paly the basketball and football.That father'day is very happy. Because we does too much different thing.My hope father happy veryday.