文中单词拼写做的不错,另外再增加词汇量积累就更好了;若增加一些长难句的使用,文章会更好;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;请注意分段。
It is a father's day.I want to with father talk about father'day a little stroy.My father tells me can help father clean home and cook breakfast in the father'day.This is father like to see the thing.SO I go up early help parents cook breakfast. When my parents go to kitchen see anything is very happy. In father'day ,my parents and l go to the park paly the basketball and football.That father'day is very happy. Because we does too much different thing.My hope father happy veryday.