单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;作者可适当增加词汇的丰富度,部分句子有错误;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;请注意分段。
It is a father's day.I want to with father talk about father'day a little stroy.My father tells me can help father clean home and cook breakfast in the father'day.This is father like to see the thing.SO I go up early help parents cook breakfast. When my parents go to kitchen see anything is very happy. In father'day,my parents and l go to the park paly the basketball and football.That father'day is very happy. Because of we does different thing.My hope father happy very day.