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With the computer is used widely,the internet is thought widely by person.Many people use the internet each day.They think that the internet is quick and convenient,and it make our works and studies can be completed for high efficiency.Many persons can purchase required things quickly,for example:Clothing、Shoes and Comptuters ect. They can buy anything there. So it is welcomed extremely. However,It is very harmful that many young boys and girls spend more time on the internet in their daily life. They play games on the computer,even if they lost interest of studies.It was very terrible and took more unhealthy habit for young people.So many parents do not agree their children touch the computer. In my opinion,the internet has good face and baneful face.It is important that we must arrange reasonable time and don't waste of more times on play games.
