文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;应增加句子的多样性,注意个别句子错误;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
How to keep healthy? That is a problem that most people always want to know. It is very necessary for us to keep our healthy.The most important is keep our eat and drink is safety.We should eat food what make by oil less and less.And we are supposed to eat more vegetables and fruit to keep our fit. And then,we all should obey the rules of traffic.Because we have to save our life. Also,relax feeling can make people happy and longevity. Now you've gotten the secret of keep healthy and happy.