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This is our house which in the a small mountain called Sunnan. the colour of house is green and white. it is a small and beautiful living place for my family. There are five rooms in the house. The big one is a dinner room, the sallest one is kitchen. my room is face to road and is very noisy in the moring. I hope I can have a quilt room. In front of the house, there are many sunfowers and roses in the garden. I like garden very much. I always watering the glasses and flower in the morning. The most thing I like it I can sit on the bench in the garden and reading my favorite book.