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My holidaies always make me happy. I like holidaies. what did I do in my summer vacation? I went to Japan with my Mom and spent so interesting holiday. I want to share some my favorite food to you. I like all japanese food, they are all delicious. but Sushi is my favorite food, I can eat it for three meals a day if Mom buy it for me. Tokyo Disney land is a best place for me. I hope I can stay and live there forever, there are so many beautiful bulilding like place in the Katoon castle. I like the small word most, everything in the small world is small and cute. there are more than 100 countriys music and song in there. I enjoy my holidy because of my great travel of Japan.