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小学一年级英语作文:Good friend

发布时间:2013-05-15 11:36浏览次数:36978[网页划词已开启]
要求:
用英文描述下自己的好朋友。
用户的作文(系统评分71.5分
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词汇表达不够丰富,要增加学术词汇的使用;简单句型过多,从句使用不熟练;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用;请注意分段。

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My friend is ping, she is very beautiful,lovely and thin. We recognized when we were the small girl.We have the same interesting,the same aim,the same dream. We had studied and eat together for many years.There is much happy memory between us. We separated when we were adult because we have the different target.She settled in my hometown and I live in a big city.Nonetheless we still miss each other.We will have a meet in october,she has a son and I have a daughter.I very expect the day will arrive early.

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