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My friend is ping, she is very beautiful,lovely and thin. We recognized when we were the small girl.We have the same interesting,the same aim,the same dream. We had studied and eat together for many years.There is much happy memory between us. We separated when we are adult because we choose the different work and diferrent city.She settled in my hometown and I live in a big city.Nonetheless we still miss each other.We will have a meet in october,she has a son and I have a daughter.I very expect the day will arrive early.