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my hometown i'm 31 years old this year ,more than 20years ago ,i was a child the houses in the town is low ,most of them are only one floor ,and there many keekwilee-house,we usually catched the kee in the holes at the wall.and now when you come to my hometown you can see there all the buildings whitch has more than two floors .on the other hands every household have car people's life are become more and more comfortable. we must work harder ,so that our hometown would become more and more beautiful.