- 分享到:
可适当增加文中长句和复杂句的使用；有效地使用了语句间的衔接成分；作者词汇表达较丰富，学术词汇词汇使用准确，但要避免拼写出错。
Nowerdays ,it's a tendency that most people especially young people take much time to shopping on online . Why shopping on online is attributed to many reasons . On the one hand , more and more people possess with computer , which make shopping on online possible . On the other hand , people would make purchase on online as long as they want , in the meantime , they can save much money because of the lower expense rather than go shopping in crowed and limited markets . However , shopping on online is sure of having some negative affects on people . People sometimes meet with troubles while they enjoin going shopping on online . For exemple , the clothes' color as well as size are incompatible with the picture which provide by the computer . From my viewpiont , in fact , going shopping with computer has a lot with our experience , coupled with our consuming habit . Giving a priority to what we really need intead of being hooked on the lower price is saner . We shoud lay emphasis on significant information , keepping our needs in mind .
