2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

语句间的衔接成分用的不错，同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富；文章词汇使用丰富度还要提高，学术词汇的积累上也要再接再厉；能够使用一些简单的从句；请注意分段。

At the present ,it is a universal phonomenon that a great deal of commodity are excessive packaging . The reason that account for the phenomenon conclude two aspects.On the one hand , businessman look for interests excessively ,because ordinary commodity 's price far lower than these it was packed excessively . On the other hand , many consumer enjoy buying these fine packing in order to contain their face As far as I am concerned ,it will result in waste if businessman still do it .we should hold a healthy consumptive concept ,collect these practical commodity rather than these commodity with excessive packaging and expensive