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Playing football is my favorate sports. I fall in love with the playing football by chance. someday after school on my road to home, I found a fooball in the glasses and nobody want it so I picked it up and carry it to my home. Because I have a football , I oftern call my friends to play football on every weekends. Day after day I found I am more and more interested in playing the amazing sports. In order to imporve our playing football skills, we often training and competition with classmates, through the interesting game, we development deeply friendship and improving our skills. As you know, just like other boys who likes footballs, the English famous football star, Bekehanm is my favorate star. I have wachted his mathces for 6 years. Truth be told, my greatest dream is to be a professional football player. I will try my best to let my dream come true.