文中词汇表达多样性不足,在学术词汇方面尤其要多积累;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;全文结构较为严谨。
My friends is Ben who comes from USA.We have known each other for ten years .We often talk on the Web.If he arrived in China , i would introduce some areas to him . I wanna introduce my hometown to him .There are plenty of fun in my life ,so i wanna share with him .If he felt bored ,maybe i would take him to the pool ,as we can swim here . Next ,My hometown is know for delicious food ,so i wanna take him to eat .