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My hometown is a beautiful town in the past.You can see green trees here and the fish are playing in the river.The house is simple and the street is narrow.People lived an easy and happy life.But now,the tall buildings are being built instead of the simple house.Cars go out in the street without big or small.Trees are being cut down and the fish disappeared.The environment becomes badly by the development of industry.Governance the pollution become the first important issue now.