文中词汇使用较丰富,学术词汇使用要加强;能够熟练使用从句并合理分配;全文结构较为严谨。
People wish to get happiness,but few can get good results.There are always problems which confused us,let us stumbled and almost fell.People don`t know how to get with it,it seems difficult.What I want to express is that happiness is not the absence of problems,but the ability to deal with them. Take Michael Jordan as a example,he is a player with talent.What`s more, he is known for his hard working,he will practise his shooting skills for several hours every day,so that he can shot on any condition and hold his accuracy at a high level,that`s why he can win a lot of champion, which means happiness to him,just because he get over the problem,once and for all.You may also know Steve Jobs,he says that the happiness comes from the success which led its apple products make progress,become perfect and is satisfied with the buyer. There is always a way to get over the problem,don`t falter in ,find your way out and you will get happiness as you want.