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These days, From Media to Wechat, a disscussion about uncivilized behaviors of Chinese tourist in Englind has attracted more and more people to participate it. Among various of comments in this dussicussion, most of people's opinion is that they think we Chinese people whith long history and ancient civilization should be acted as a civilized people no matter what we are in home or abord. unfortunately, uncivilized behaviors can be seen in our daily lives. Such as spitting in the public, talking loudly and jump to queue at the train station or other pulic places are and so on. these bad behaviors no question have a bad affect on Chinese good reputation. the visitors who from foreign country will think we are short of moral education and impolite. In my view, I strongly believe that Form a good habits when we are young is very important. For this reason, to act a well-behaved is very important and urgent thing for children's education. The schools and parents should to pay more attentioin to educate the children don't spit in the public, don't talking loudly in the public and don't jump in queue. Once people knew what is a cilivized behaviors when they are young, they will form a good habits to act a good behaviors.