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Cheng Do is an "Food Township". Although a restaurant that have much delicious food, but I better like than eat at home. At the home, we can also enjoy many delicious food. In addition, we can taste out about "taste home". When we eat at home, We can taste the original flavor without aginomoto. About the investigation,eat most the aginomoto will influence our eyes. Let's us eye disability. That's the advantages of wating at home.
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