希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是学术词汇的积累;运用了一些简单从句,但不是很熟练;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Now,many people like to eat in the restaurant.The most important reason is:it's fast than you cook.Although it's expensive.In my point of view.advantages of eating at home are more than eating at restaurant. First.It's clean and safe for you if you eating at home.We all know,oil in the restaurant is very bad.It's bad for our health.The food is not clean,too.They maybe never wash the vegetable. Second.It's cheap for you to eat at home.For example,whether you want to eat a fish,beef or bacon.You may buy it in supermarket just for a 30 yuan.But,if you want to eat in the restaurant,it's very expensive.maybe 100 yuan or 150 yuan. Third.Eat at home is good for children growing up.The food we make by ourselves is more healthy than restaurant,and it's fit our.Just like me.I always eat at home.I'm strong and grow up health. All in all,There are many advantages of eating at home.So,let's cook in our home.
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