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my favorite sport is play football.I fall in love with football by chance.I found a football when I went to home.Afer I play this football with my friends,and we played football exiety and happy .since then I was abosrb in football deeply. Now,I ofen compete with classmates and practice with them.My favorite superstar of football is backhame.I wish I can become a professional football player.