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My favorite sport is playing football.I fall in love with football by chance.I found a football when I went home.Afer I play this football with my friends,and we played football exciting and happy .Since then I am absorbed in football deeply. Now,I often compete and practice with my classmates.My favorite football superstar is Beckham.I wish I can become a professional football player.