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My cherish friendshipEvery one need friends,me too.Because friends can give your encouragement to overcome the difficulties and lend a brightness to your life.Sometime,you must be grateful to them.Many people forsake his friends in favor of money or power.That's absolutely wrong.You should know that money and power are temporary and that friends are everlasting.That shoal be everyone's creed.To me,without friends,I am nothing.There was a time when my life was broken-hearted.My friends gave me in large quantities sympathy,joy and love------things that saved me.Then,I was aware that I was so blessedness and lucky!I owe my friends many kindnesses.How can I repay them?But,I understand they don't need me to do that.In my opinion, this is true friendship and I really cherish it.
