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Dear Pacival, I am thrilled to know that youare going to visit my hometown and I can't wait see you again.Imiss everything that happened when I was in your city,and your parents and you were so kind to me that I will try my best this time to make your stay an enjoyable and memerable one。 My home town,Changsha,is the capital of Hunan province and best known as the star city for itswell developed entertainment industry and tourism.There arenumerous places and attractions worth recommending,and YueluMountain is the first one that I'd like to introduce to you.Firstly,in the foot of Yuelu Mountain is the prominent YueluAcademy.It has an exceedingly long history and its architecture ischaracteristic of Song Dynasty.Then,after a half hour,we willreach the Bird Forest.There are various rare birds there,and they can sing,perform,and interact with us.After about an hour,we will arrive at the peak,Baiyun Summit.The scenery there isspectacular and we can have a wonderful panorama of the wholecity。 I bet you must be very excited about all these activities,and the Yuelu Mountain is waiting for us to explore.All you need to do is pack up and go,and I assure you that this trip will be a great fun。 Should you have any questionand suggestion,please let me know。 I am looking forward to your arrival。 Yours sincerely, Romeo