文中词汇表达灵活多样,也能较好的使用部分学术词汇;使用了部分简单的长难句,可适当增加一些复杂的长句;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。
The Internet is making the world smaller and is changing every aspect of our life. There can be no doubt that the Internet will have greater impact on our society and economy. The impact, in my opinion, will be strongly felt in the aspect of education. First, the Internet provides equal opportunities for all students, as long as they can get access to the Internet. In the traditional form of education, students who get higher marks in examination may enter a better school, and those who do not have to enter a relatively less good one. With the Internet, every student is provided with the same sources of education, so they can get equal opportunities to improve themselves. In that case, the general quality of education will be highly improved in our country. Second, the Internet poses a challenge, not a danger really to teacher. Traditionally, teachers are the dominator of education, and students are fixed to t he instruction of several specific teachers. This, in fact, may result in the laziness of teachers, since there is no competition. With the Internet, a student may choose any teacher’s instruction as far as he likes it, which is an incentive to the faculty of teachers. Faced with this, a teacher is likely to try his be st to improve his instruction and this will in turn improve the educational quality of our country. Last but not least, the internet makes education more convenient for the students. A student can learn at any time he likes and, at the same time, save the money spent on tuition and board. All of these may head to a revolution of education. After ail, I am not exaggerating the influence of the Internet on education.It is true that the Internet may still remain out of the reach of some one and may be less amicable than human teachers. But the point is that, the Internet i s sure to accelerate the development of education. With the Internet, let us make the education of our country into a better existence.