文中单词拼写做的不错,另外再增加词汇量积累就更好了;简单句偏多了;连接词过少,建议增加衔接词汇的积累;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开;连词使用偏少;可以适当增加副词的使用。
To. sales-department@hotmail.com From.wanghaiyang@hotmail.com Date. 13 o'clock December 23rd, 2008 Dear Mr. Johnson, We had received the 3000 products from your company on the day of December 22nd.But according to NO. 35 quatation we had made, the number should be 3500 pcs.We had no get the other 500 pcs. We expected to check the delievry receipt,and We are looking forward to your early reply! Best regards yours Wang Haiyang-