雅思写作范文:父母应该多陪孩子

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With the development of the economy,parents have more and more stress than before,so they spend most of their time in making money. Parents have little time with they children. They think give more money to their kids means that they love them more. However,what they do is wrong. Parents should spend more time with their kids. There are some reasons that parents should care their kids.First,if parents have little time with their kids, their kids will feel very lonely.Second,kids who has less attention from parents will think that their parents don't love them. Third,money can not bring happiness. Lots of kids intendly act badly in the school to cause the attention from their parents.They also easily get crime for whthout caring from families. So parents should take more time to their kids. This is a very useful way to communicate with their kids.