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My Favorite sport I am a football lover.I am crazy about football. The reason why I love it is a interesting story.I fall in love with football by accident.I picked up a soccer ball on the way to my home and I shared with my friends. We played with each other .Since then I have been in love with it deeply.I always trained and competited with my teammate. What's more ,I like beikehanmu who comes from English best .I am a big fan of him.Because he is my idol,I decide to be a professional football player .So I will work much harder to make it comes true .