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The day my classmate got injured ,her feet can't move constantly ,The doctor said if she wants to recovery ,she need rest at least two months .During the classmate got injured,Our classmates turns to care for her in hospital,Beause I am her good friends ,I go to hospital every day.Looking my classmates did so much thing for her,I feel so moved.Besides,Our teacher usually go to hospital to teach her how to do homework,The teacher is patient,So we all like her. If you care someone's soul and body .maybe can't bring you money ,but you can get constant friendship.
