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My new teacher is from jiangxi, she is a girl. she love to smile, and she is very tender. she has big eyes, tall nose, white skin. when i feel disappoint, she always courage me.all of my classmete love her very much, she takes care us likes sisiter.why you suddenly use english, you confused me, you can speak english with me