单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;正确句子比例较高,适当增加复杂句的使用,文章会更出色;衔接词汇很少,建议加强过渡词和连接词的积累;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
My new teacher is from jiangxi, she is a girl. She loves to smile, and she is very tender. Her eyes are very big and the nose is very tall, skin is very white. When I disappoint, she always encourages me.All of my classmates love her very much, she likes a sister to take care us. When I graduated from school, I saw her so few times. I know she married and has a son.her family is very happiness.