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My new teacher is from jiangxi, she is a girl. She loves to smile ,and she is very tender. Her eyes are very big and the nose is very tall, skin is very white. When I disappoint, she always encourages me.All of my classmates love her very much, she likes a sister to take care us. When I graduated from school, I saw her so few times. I know she married and has a son.Her family is very happy.But the live did not last for a long time, there was an incident occur to her.