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小学一年级英语作文:My New Teacher

发布时间:2013-05-15 11:32浏览次数:7160
要求:
描述我的新老师。
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My new teacher is from jiangxi, she is a girl. She loves to smile ,and she is very tender. Her eyes are very big and the nose is very tall, skin is very white. When I disappoint, she always encourages me.All of my classmates love her very much, she likes a sister to take care us. When I graduated from school, I saw her so few times. I know she married and has a son.Her family is very happy.But the life lasted for a very short time, there was an incident occur to her. Her son had sick.It took much money to cure it.

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