作者词汇表达丰富度要继续提升,学术词汇使用过少;正确句子比例较高,适当增加复杂句的使用,文章会更出色;衔接词汇很少,建议加强过渡词和连接词的积累;连词使用偏少。
My new teacher is from jiangxi, she is a girl. She loves to smile ,and she is very tender. Her eyes are very big and the nose is very tall, skin is very white. When I disappoint, she always encourages me.All of my classmates love her very much, she likes a sister to take care us. When I graduated from school, I saw her so few times. I know she married and has a son.Her family is very happy.But the life lasted for a very short time, there was an incident occur to her. Her son had sick.It took much money to cure it.