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My new teacher is from jiangxi, she is a girl. She loves to smile,and she is very tender. Her eyes are very big and the nose is very tall, skin is very white. When I disappoint, she always encourages me.All of my classmates love her very much, she likes a sister to take care us. When I graduated from school, I saw her so few times. I know she married and has a son.Her family is very happy.But the life lasted for a very short time, there was an incident occur to her. Her son got a strange sick.It took considerably money to cure it.Unfortunately her son deceased eventually. She felt extremely sad and she sobbed every day.When I went to visit her, I found she looked very bad.