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Playing football is my favorite. I fell in love with it by chance. I picked up a football on my way home and then, I played football with my friends. From then on, I deeply fell in love with the playing football. I often train with my classmates and sometimes we entered for the football competition. My team never wins the football game. But we are still very happy. Because we play football with my classmate. Amony all the football star, my best-loved a football star whom is Backham. My greatest dream is that became a professional.