雅思写作范文:出国旅游的利弊

结构良好，但是语言不流畅；句子错误偏多，建议修改；作者能较灵活使用学术词汇，但词汇量仍需继续积累单词拼写要认真；连词使用偏少；请注意分段；可以适当增加副词的使用。

Travelling abroad is one of the popuplar way for people to spend time in vocation. Some people think it is a increase the avenue to ensure the wellfare of the local people experience the exotic feeling, and meantime to spread the unique cultrue they own culture identity is confused numerous cultural confilct are arisen due to tourists refuse to follow the tens of thousands of vistors is a disaster to an attraction