单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;如果增加些复杂句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用;请注意分段;连词使用偏少;可以适当增加副词的使用。
I would like to take her to Tianyige to see a large number of books.I think there are much gold in books,we must know the importance of good books. In my opinion,the books in Tianyige are rural .Books carry our ancestors‘s wit and are worth reading .So I think I would like to take her to Tianyige.