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I'm sorry to hear that you have problem like this.I would give you some advice so that you can deal with the problem well.There are some tips that can help you. First, you should show your care.Let she know though you are not in the same school ,you are friend forever.Talk with her is a good way to express your attention. Besides,you should try your best to visit her.Doing homework together,communicating with each other is another way to develop your friendship. Of course,you should also know,only both of you are devoted to this thing can you get reward. All in all,you just need do what I say to you.I think your friend would understand you.There is a deep connection between her and you,isn't it?Don't worry about it,everything will be ok. Lastly,congratulate you success.