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My hometown is Tianjin.Tianjin is a big city and it has a long history.Nowadays My foreign friend is gong to visit my hometown.As him friend,I can make a plan for this tourism and I hope that he like it. At first,we should go to the museum .Although the place is not beautiful view,we can know that the past Tianjin was granting .And then ,we should go to the Nanshi Food street He eats some dileious food .From it ,he can know feature in it.Finally ,we are going to Tianjin of Eye,when we sits in it at the top ,we can look the Tianjin of all aspect . That place are interested in Tianjin and its stand up Tianjin,I hope you like this tourism.
