- 分享到:
句法知识很棒，若增加一些从句的使用，文章会更出色；文中词汇表达丰富度不足，一些学术词汇的使用也比较灵活；不能熟练使用过渡词，文章结构欠佳；请提高文章内敛性，段落和句子要围绕主题展开。
My hometown is Tianjin.Tianjin is a big city and it has a long history.Nowadays My foreign friend is gong to visit my hometown.As him friend,I can make a plan for this tourism and I hope that he like it. firstly,we should go to the museum.Although the place is not beautiful view,we can know that the past Tianjin was granting.And then ,we should go to the Nanshi Food street. He eats some dileious food.From it,he can know feature in it.Finally ,we are going to Tianjin of Eye.when we sits in it at the top ,we can look the Tianjin of all aspect . That place is interested in Tianjin and it stands up Tianjin,I hope you like this tourism.
