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With the sharp development of technology,the digital thing gradually becomes a significant part of our daily life. It changes our lifestyle and gives great convenience to work and study in all time.There is no doubt that we have entered the digital age. Definitely,our life need digital things.When we want to calculate some problems.The computer will help us get rid of the worry about the calculate.Every time we travel somewhere,many photos taken by the digital camera which are sharing in the friend circle.However,every coin has 2 sides.At the matter of fact,the digital thing will do harm to our reality life if we can't take disadvantage of them.For example, many teenager boy prefer playing games to making friends.What make me desperate thing is that they are just drunk in the internet all days and wanna do nothing.Plus,some people pay more attention to the friends circle rather than the contemporary feeling. At my perspective, at no time should we oversee many important thing in the digital ages.