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There are many people watching CCTV Spring party in China.Of course,it is very interesting. Now,CCTV Spring party is a nation party,many people is watching it as habit.As one saying goes,every coin has two sides.Some people don't think it worthly to hold.They think it is waste money and time. In my opinion,CCTV Spring party is a good patry.It should hold every year and I like it. Every times I was delight to watching it.And my family always watch it together.