2014年6月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):A Beautiful City in China

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If you come to china,i"ll take you to visit to my hometown-Qingdao.Have you ever heard of Qingdao?Qingdao is one of the most famous city in china.The develop of qingdao is very fast.But it is very different from beijing.The population of qingdao is less than beijing.The sky of qingdao is very blue and very beautiful.Air is very fresh.Qingdao is near the sea.I can take you yo the beach and we can eat seafood barbecue.You can imagine,we enjoy the wind,visit the sea and eat saefood barbecue on the beach.That's sounds great,isn't it?On the other hand,Qingdao beer is very famous in the world.You need to experience the beautiful by your self.I'm looking forward to your come.