文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;全文结构较为严谨,应适当增加文中衔接词的使用;采用了一些简单的从句。
Nowadays, the Internet is more popular and important.Almost everybody often surf the Internet.What's more,millions of young people have made friends online.As far as I'm concerned,It is not wise to make friends online. As we all known,everything has its benefit and shortcoming.There are several disadvantages as followed.First,the Internet is virtual,so we can't guess whether is true.Second,online anybody can be your friend,because his information mostly is wrong. Third,there are many typical cases that many young people were cheated by their friend online.Fourth,you can't make a real friend online. In my opinion,I disagree people make friends online. When we chat with others,we shouldn't trust them completely.
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