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my foreign friend will come here, are where the most beautiful city?i think that the beijing city is a beautiful city in china,because we knew it has some nice place,for example, the great wall has too longer history on her body,she seems to a peace old man ,and she is a culture's symbol in china. if you see it that i promise to love it ; the palace museum is a spring that is more high、more fast and more strong .our country will become better than the pass time,and the beijing control to us dream and fulture. of course, the city has a lot of famous foods,such as,the beijing's duck is so delicious, the candied haws on a stick has other's local flavour snacks,and so on, i believe that it is worth of come place, i'm look forward to coming here.
