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this is a world of internet.we nearly cannot achieve or procure anything without internet.in this highly developed world,in this global world,to communicate with other people by the internet is absolutely unavioded.and the extent you contact with other people by internet can determine the way of life and how much you can achive your value.From there,we can get information from and about other people .we can also make friends there.it seems that it has dominated the way that interpersonal communication.however,what i want to say is it does not change the essence of personal relationship.inthernet is only a tool which could lead to instantenous contact with each other. however,to add you as a friend does not necessarily mean he or she will be your real friend.instead, even someone treats you as his or her friend,he may does not need to add you in the qq or wechat.tool is just tool,it can never replace or create ture friendship.a mean to something does not mean something itself.in a world, internet is just useful to contact more people,it is useless to foster and maintain good relationship.
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