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内容：本人在12月15日到22日在纽约举行的展览会期间了解到贵公司产品号为5670的新产品，非常感兴趣，请贵方发给我们一份价格单和说明书。感谢贵方的合作，希望我们可以建立贸易关系。
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1．price list and instruction价格单和说明书
2．establish business relationship建立贸易关系
简单句偏多，应增加从句使用；请作者增加词汇表达的丰富度，且检查文中的拼写错误；层次不够清晰，文中很少使用衔接词；连词使用偏少。
From:hubin@163.com Date:Dec.23,2014 To:KPOHsales@hotmail.com Subject:Establish business relationship Dear KPOHsales, I am proud of talking to you.I am very glad to attendented the show on 15 to 22,Dec. in NewYork. During the show,i discovered the new producion from your company,the number is 5670. I am very interested in it and i love it.It's amazing. Therefore,i hope i can get a price list and instruction.Thanks to your contantion. I hope we can make the establish business relationship.i am looking forward to working with you. From hunbin.
