单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;作者句法基础较为扎实;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用;请注意分段;连词使用偏少;可以适当增加副词的使用。
My hometown is a beach city We can see the sea from my house's window The sea is quite beautiful. The seaside is hot in summer and it's windy and cold in winter The Spring, many people like to go enjoy sunshine in the seaside The Summer, our neighbor go to dig the astarte for eating The astarte is delicious.